It was a dark and story night – that’s a weak sentence. Nothing is happening and it’s all a matter of the verb. Notice that it’s the verb “to be.” How about – Lightning smashed through the sky. Rain pelted our campsite. Low black clouds covered the sky.
The key is the verb “to be” in all its forms, is, was, has been, will be, etc. Every time you replace the verb “to be” you make your writing stronger. I shouldn’t say “you;” I should say “me, I.” I have a long way to go.
When you finish a page or a chapter, click on tools and run the section through the grammar checker. At the end it will tell you how many passive sentences, how many words per sentence and the reading ease of the section. For example, this blog
0 passive sentences
11.2 words per sentence
93.5% the reading ease
2.7 the grade level that can read this
(It’s my belief that we should aim down the grade level. Then more people can read our work)