“I like it, Ed. I really got into the heads of some of these criminals, but who’s this Delaney?”
“What?” I replied. “He’s the hero of the novel.”
“Look,” the reader said, “you start with the day the prison opens and then you jump right into the stories of your criminals. I liked those stories, one after the other, but I never got to know Delaney.”
I was upset. I had a clear picture of Delaney in my head, the guy who pulled this new prison idea off. Why couldn’t my reader see it?
But as I calmed down, I thought about his comment. I did begin with what is now chapter five, Opening Day. Right away I portrayed the criminals one after the other, but there really was no explanation of Delaney.
So I started over. How did Delaney come up with this idea? What was the key event that put him on the path of making a change? How did people take to his idea?
I wrote the first four chapters and then added a lot more about Delaney as the story went on.
I believe with Delaney that there are a lot better ideas for prison than what we have now.
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